read the first bit of a short story, please? I know it’s not edgy, but it’s near and dear to me. It’s cute
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Jehovah’s Witnesses are not "looking for lost souls". They are obeying Jesus explicit commands. Really, everyone who respects and obeys Jesus Christ goes from door to door to teach his neighbors about the Bible’s good news. It is interesting that only Jehovah’s Witnesses are so clearly identified with the preaching work; globally more than 6 million preach publicly each month.
(Matthew 28:19,20) Go therefore and make disciples of people of all the nations, baptizing them in the name of the Father and of the Son and of the holy spirit, teaching them to observe all the things I have commanded you.
(Acts 5:42) Every day in the temple and from house to house they continued without letup teaching and declaring the good news about the Christ, Jesus.
(Acts 20:20) I did not hold back …from teaching you publicly and from house to house
It’s sad when someone who claims to respect the bible actually insults or even advocates attacking a peaceful preacher. Sad but completely expected.
(2 Timothy 4:3-5) For there will be a period of time when they will not put up with the healthful teaching… You, though, keep your senses in all things, suffer evil, do the work of an evangelizer, fully accomplish your ministry.
Really, if someone goes out of their way to disregard Christian preachers and preaching, what is he saying about himself?
(Luke 10:1-17) After these things the Lord designated seventy others and sent them forth by twos… “He that listens to you listens to me too. And he that disregards you disregards me too. Moreover, he that disregards me disregards also him that sent me forth.”
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Good read… thanks!
I’m sorry, but I just wasn’t interested. It seems like your writing style is a bit too straightforward and almost blunt. Try being a little more descriptive, leaving a little more to the imagination. Honestly, your first sentence is awful. It doesn’t draw the reader in. Start with something that will really make your reader think, then jump into the story.
I feel like it’s missing something. Rewrite and try again?
Your plot is decent. A little hard to follow, but I’m sure it will connect with certain readers. Your characters, I must say, are very good and quite vivid. That was definitely the best thing about this piece. I felt like I was starting to get to know them.
It felt like you jumped from subject to subject a little. But that’s not necessarily a bad thing. Maybe if you slowed down the pace a little it would be easier to see where all this is going.
All in all, I would give it a B-. That is, if I were grading it. There are definitely good parts, but overall it needs a lot of work. Try a brutal rewrite and go from there.
Good luck!
Hi, just some technical help.
We Jehovah’s Witnesses are not looking for lost souls.
We would never wish to disrupt a person’s lively hood.
We are politically neutral. I "voted" for Jehovah as my leader when I dedicated my life as one of Jehovah’s Witnesses. My point is we are neither democrats nor republican.
As far is the story it stretched on somewhat. You are good at creating mental images. I think you just need to speed things along a bit, turn it from a story creating mental images, to a story that creates mental movies.
PS I find it interesting when people use my religion in their stories. It is a reminder that we are everywhere. I just ask that if you put us or references to us in your stories you do a little background research.